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Review of Nunsense  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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It's an interesting idea, possibly with the makings of a series - Calvin and the Time-Travelling Nun! I mean, there must be other ways to employ such an ability, beyond evicting the occasional demon.

You carry off the story well, keeping up the pace and providing plenty of vivid action, much of it amusing. Comedy is a difficult thing to do in print (belly laughs are few and far between) but you provided plenty of smiles. And all this without typos or obvious errors. Someone has been doing a good editing job!

I have one quibble. That "CAAAALLLVVVVIIINN" is unnecessary, I feel. Just capitalising each letter is enough to show that it's shouted (which kind of makes a nonsense of the statement that she whispered it, however loudly). Multiplying letters is cartoony and we can get the same effect by just adding an exclamation mark at the end. That's what they're for, after all.

Other than that, I can't fault it. You could draw in a few more readers by adding a genre to the two already chosen in the heading, but that's it. Well done!

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