It’s a well written poem with a sensible message about relationships and the way to retain them.

Here are a few edits if you like.

“So….. to walk right out that door”
(……..right out of that door)

“in tact”
(intact)

“hold it to possessively or to tight…”
(hold it too possessively or too tight…)

Suggestion-
Punctuation is necessary, especially in the last part of this item, which follows prose format.
Punctuation will lend clarity, consistency and readability.

Write on!




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