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 | saturday's bulemic cat  [E] it is not easy to 'rise above' the tyranny of svelte-ness  |
| (4.0)| Hello christo This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   I enjoyed visiting your port and reading your writing. Interesting piece. It probably speaks of thousands upon thousands of people. Sadly. I like the analogy of the woman doing yoga and the cat. Nice job. Title and Description - The title definitely caught my attention and the play on words in the description, urged me to read on. Theme/Subject Matter:-It's a sad tale about a bulemic alcholic. Probably repeating her days, day after day.  Characters - Nice use of your words in a short piece to let us get to know the main character. Originality/Creativity:- An original work told in a creative way. Good job. Setting - I was able to envision each scene nicely as I read. Emotion/Impact: - It left this reader with a sad emotional impact, feeling for the main character, and knowing that this is all too relatable for far too many people. My Suggestions - side ways, sideways  musn'tmustn't  clawing,No comma needed. was there is gone!"[c:red}there was is gone!"  could, not, eatNo commas are needed. Favorite Part {/c]- and the cat,performing sleek, black yoga in the sun, stretching (her patience) and clawing, puts a frantic edge on the background music  Summary: I enjoyed reading your piece. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You last responded to this review 01/13/2024 @ 4:45am EST