Lullaby Women [13+] A short ghost story based on the Russian ghost stories I was raised in. |
Hello n. gwynn This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with. Wow. Good story. It has a strong opening that hooked me, the middle kept me reading, and an ending I didn't see coming! Nice job! Title and Description - Perfect title and description. The description urged me to read on. Theme/Subject Matter:- A story based on a Russian Grandma's horror stories, becomes all too real to one grandson. Will he remember his grandma's warnings in time? Characters - Strong character development helped me to get to know each of the main characters. Originality/Creativity:- Nice original story with a fabulous creative spin. Especially in the ending. Setting - Nice job on including the setting in your story. It helped me visualize each scene as I read. Emotion/Impact: - I was screaming at the grandson in the ending. Nice job on a strong emotional impact for this reader. My Suggestions - Misha, No comma needed. 17 Always spell out low numbers head, frizzed No comma needed or simple desire or a simple desire knew that, because No comma needed. mind, but didn't raise No comma needed. try take them try to take them Summary: I truly enjoyed this story. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. KEEP ON WRITING ON! Intuey My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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