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 Someone I Know Open in new Window. [E]
A poem about a flaky classmate from long ago
by Elisa: Snowman Stik Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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The title is catchy, and not specific. The brief description makes it clear whom you are talking of. It's the brief description that intrigued me. You might want to take another look at the genres, and tweak them if you like. Also, is this a particular form of poetry? If yes, do put a note about the form at the end, for the reader's benefit.

The poem made me smile. I could picture this person, walking around in a daze. Yes, one does come across people like this!

Suggestion:
Just a small suggestion.
While the rest of the words flow well, the word 'collapsing' tripped me up a bit, both in terms of the reading and the imagining. 'Collapse' seems too drastic for this poem, somehow.

Thanks for sharing this poem!
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