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 A Medal for Sven Open in new Window. [13+]
When a little girl teaches Sven three magical words--how many are saved?
by Joto-Kai Author Icon
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Review by 👼intuey Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Joto-Kai Author Icon This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" Open in new Window. [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with. *Smile*


*Reading* What a sweet story with such an amazing message! You had a strong beginning that hooked me. The story kept me interested throughout, and I truly enjoyed the ending. Nice job! *Smile*

*Balloon2* Title and Description - Great title that's to the point. A good description that urged me to read on.

*Penr* Theme/Subject Matter:- The story shows that one doesn't have to be a sword-wielding warrior to be a hero. We're all heroes in our own special way. We need to just let our light shine to offer our own unique gifts. *Heart*

*Flower1* Characters - Very strong main character. I was able to visualize and get to know him well.

*Penb*Originality/Creativity:- Nice original story with a creative storyline.

*Balloon4* Setting - Good use of setting that allowed this reader to envision each scene as I read along with the story.

*Flower3*Emotion/Impact: - A 'feel good' kind of story.

*Balloon4* My Suggestions -

*Reading* any of them, wished

any of them, and wished

*Penv* They welcomed him,

No comma needed.

*Books2* abide intruders

abide by intruders

*Reading* gripped the handle,

No comma needed.

*Peng* He nodded, as if

No comma needed.

*Books3* star-burning-tip

star-burning tip

*Reading* etched in gold

are etched in gold

*Peno* ran back where they came.

ran back to where they came from.

*Penv*My Favorite Part: - The part where Sven helps the little girl and the ending. Fabulous finish.


*Peng*Summary: I truly enjoyed reading your story. Thanks so much for sharing it with us.

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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