Hi, Jacky, I’m reviewing this story for Read and Review. I see this is an old story written six years ago. I often read your entries in The Flash Fiction Contest.
This story of nosy Jan who loved nothing more than to peek into others windows is one which could do with expanding but of course you’re limited in flash fiction to the requirements of the contest, usually around three hundred.
My suggestions are: Tonight, in her old neighborhood walking home after visiting her parents. It was like being a fly on the wall as she walked by window after window of people she’d known all her life These two sentences would be better written as one complete sentence.
I was confused whether the stone house was still a brothel or had it been sold and was a private home?
Was Jan’s husband visiting a brothel or was Cathy simply having an affair with him behind Jan’s back? It would be good to clear up that confusion. It might just be me who didn’t quite understand though.
Thanks for sharing.
Sue

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .