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Review #4712063
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 Realm Rangers  [13+]
Experience traveling between two dimensional worlds as different as night and day.
by brom21
Review of Realm Rangers  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello brom21 } This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with. *Smile*


*Reading* This was a good and interesting story. I really enjoyed it. With a bit of editing, it will be made even better!

*Balloon2*
Title and Description - Great creative title that drew my attention. The description sounded like this would be an amazing story. It urged me to read on. *Smile*

*Penr*
Theme/Subject Matter:- It's about a group of travelers called Ralam Rangers that travel between this earth and a dark shadow type earth. When an accident happens on a Realm Ranger's first trip, he takes measures he'll always regret.

*Flower1*
Characters - Nice job on the characters involved. I was able to get to know the main characters.

*Penb*
Originality/Creativity:- A creative story indeed. Great job with originality.

*Balloon4*
Setting - You do an excellent job with setting. I was easily able to visualize each scene as I read and felt what the characters were experiencing.

*Flower3*
Emotion/Impact: - I could feel the emotions of the characters. I was so surprised by the ending. I felt sadness, disgust and disappointment, but understanding to a degree at the same time.

*Balloon4*
My Suggestions -

*Reading* the means in


the means by


*Penb* that lead

that led


*Bookstack2* twelve year old

twelve-year-old


*Reading* round them is feels

around them feels


*Reading* “Yes they can.

"Yes, they can.


*Penr* both Earth’s

both Earths


*Books2* weapons and

weapons, and


*Reading* accompanied with being

accompanied by being


*Penbl* if I get loss?

if I get lost?


*Books1* transceiver arm band,

transceiver armband,


*Reading* sweat to run down

sweat running down


*Peng* looking at tall human

looking at the tall


*Books4* to have ben traveling

to have been traveling


*Reading* the traveling suits.

a traveling suit.

*Peng*
Summary: Thank you so much for sharing your interesting story with us. I really enjoyed it.

*Quill* KEEP ON WRITING ON! *Quill*

*Heart* Intuey

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