I liked the storyline, and the fact that he goes to save the women who I guessed were sirens However, there were a few mistakes, but I will be getting to that in a minute. Anyways, as I was saying I loved the story, and the fact that these creatures took him to the water with them.
Now I'll be getting to the mistakes. When you were mentioning the captain hearing a faint sound, you should have added a comma after 'that afternoon'. When he said 'good afternoon ladies', instead of a comma, it should've been a full stop. You also repeated 'captain' too many times in one sentence. Apart from that I liked it. Keep posting.

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