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Review #4711912
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 Onto the shore Open in new Window. [E]
A poem about the ocean
by Prosperous Snow celebrating Author Icon
Review of Onto the shore  Open in new Window.
Review by Lornda Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Bullet* I thought I'd stop by and send you a review to say thanks for all the reviewing you do for the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window. *Delight* I found one of your newer poems, and I really enjoyed reading it! The title is perfect and right from the first line it drew me in to read more. I had no trouble visualizing the scene, and I liked how it was structured with a beautiful word choice. Nice! *Stary*

*Bullet* A suggestion for your consideration: The only time it slowed down was with with this line. Third stanza - first line. I think it's a typo: ...bring with the m seaweed,

*Bullet* It flowed a long at a good pace, and my favorite was the wording of the fourth stanza. I could visualize it so well because it's exactly what I have seen before too. It's also sad that this is something happening all over the place with our beaches, so I thought it was a nice touch to add this problem to show some emotion.

*Bullet* Overall, a beautiful poem with a strong message. I'm so glad I had the opportunity to stop by and read it. Keep up the great work! *Bigsmile*

~Lornda

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