Good story, but it sounded more like a poem instead. I still liked it nonetheless. At first, it drew me in and made me want to read on, and I didn't realise that 'in the corner of the room, if you look hard enough, you will find a small, frail girl facing the bare, grey wall' was actually a quote by someone. I liked the story a lot, but I still think it was more like a poem.
There were a few mistakes. 'Moon light' should be changed to 'moonlight' or moon-light'. Apart from that it was good. Keep writing.

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