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 Jessica's Purpose Open in new Window. [13+]
A tale of a woman and her daughter increasing awareness among skeptics in a violent world.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Thank you so much for sharing this unusual ghost story. It is very touchingly told.

The title is simple and makes the story sadder.

The loss experienced by the doctor comes across clearly. I get the impression that the doctor has taken upon herself a mission to promote awareness of a subject that's very sensitive to her. However, I'm not quite sure what types of questions or what kind of participation that the doctor is hoping for. The demonstration helped to shock the attendees to pay attention. However, the direction of the overall subject matter to be covered is still a mystery.

Instantly, ... ... trafficking abounds.

I do not feel that the story prepared me to connect or relate to the audience's sudden spark of interest. Firstly, attendance is mandatory. Secondly, the doctor has presented this material for more than a decade.

Also, after the last paragraph, I found myself wondering, can all that material fit into a single lecture? Without a narrower context, the full spectrum of the topics feels extremely broad.

My feelings about how the story's last paragraph is reflected in my rating for an otherwise deep and moving piece.

Thank you for sharing this sweet, but very sad story. I will be pondering about the doctor's torment for the rest of the day. I hope you find my review helpful. Please let me know if you would like to know more about anything specific that I have not covered in my review.

~ Amy
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