This short story describes a moment really well making it very easy to visualize. I feel like I am in the car with Terry. As the snow is falling around her. The 3 paragraphs describe a lot learning where the character works and what interests. It could be a good lead in for a larger story. It seems to end very abruptly but it is enough to showcase a strong writing style and the ability to depict a scene. With class exercises, it would be interesting to know if there was a prompt to get a sense of the goal behind the short scene. Even if the assignment is freestyle I feel it would help the reader appreciate this piece more. You may consider adding an author's note section at the bottom describing this.

In any case, Really nice writing!!




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