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 That Haunting Love Story  [13+]
Violet is interested in her supervisor. What will happen? Not what you expect!
by The Puppet Master
Review by Moonstone
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Wow! You must know I'm partial to a good romance! But in all honesty this is a very good story. I love how well thought out the plot was, and the way everything sort of fell into place. I do like the idea of someone haunting someone they liked, and I liked the way you went through with this so everyone got their happy ending.
However, I do feel like the plot was a bit quick for my taste and not completely spelled out. For instance, when Violet is at the restaurant with Alice, it seems a bit rushed the way she leaves and Stan suddenly appears. For future stories, I would try to elaborate just a tad more to see the plot completely spelled out.
But your story is great and I would love to see more from you! :D
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