Hi Beholden ;

I was seeking a blue or yellow case to review and I took my chances with Read & Review. Your poem popped up.

Please remember that these comments and suggestions are just that. Your work is your own. It is perfectly okay to disregard my opinions if you do not agree.

I love the picture you have attached. Cats are a favourite of mine. We recently adopted a five year old boy. He's been with us only two months and it feels like he has always been a part of our wee family.

I really like this. I can feel the emotion and shifted equilibrium that comes in the moments of first waking and not immediately recognizing your space. I wonder if this is how a person with mild dementia faces their day? My mother has been diagnosed with mental confusion just recently so this poem resonates with that.

Thank you so much for sharing your words.

I am doing the Birthday Review challenge so I need to find something to suggest. Hard to do when everything seems in order.

One suggestion I could make is more for aesthetic appeal - to center it to give it focus.

My favourite lines:
"but I can’t help but feel
that it’s a game,
a practical joke
played by sleep
on a mind befuddled by time."

Our minds love to play tricks on us. It's just another torment of aging.

I wish you the best of the week and hope you take part in as many Birthday events as you can manage. Maybe a little writing will help strengthen that silly mind and keep it occupied with more interesting things.


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