This is a delightful holiday story full of magic and fantasy. Santa isn't up to making the Christmas Eve run, but his children are well-trained and step up to help. The story follows the prompt well in an imaginative way.


The descriptions of Santa's workshop/North Pole are well drawn and include some lovely imagery. There were some gems in describing emotions as well. I liked such phrases as "shimmered with nervous energy" and "worry skittered along her spine".

The run is successful and the future of Christmas secure as we now know who will be taking over when Santa retires.

Suggestion: There are a few incorrect words that would not be caught by a spellchecker - for instances "heals should be "heels", "descent" should be "dissent" and there is one place where "there" is used when "their" is meant. A good proofread should do to find and fix these errors.

Suggestion: This is a personal preference but I think a larger font would make the story easier to read. Small and close fonts often put the readers off and so good writing gets passed over and not read.

Suggestion:This is an error I usually make and that is not choosing the best genres to best categorize an item to make it easier for readers/reviewers to find. For instance, I have often been chastised for choosing "Contest entry" and "Other" is not a category people prioritize in searches. Choosing more appropriate genres will help your writing get seen. Try "fantasy" or "family" etc to add to "holiday".

Overall, a fun and imaginative story in response to the prompt.





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