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 Your Fictional Girl Harem  [18+]
Okay in this story,any group of fictional girls can become your harem.
by John GoodHorse
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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This is a very fun story. Not only do you include multiple series from different media, but I think it's a nice touch that you also give people the option to either start with a harem already or to build it from the start. I would very much like to read more. Despite that, the beginning could use a little bit of work.

Suggestion: when you edit the front page, you include the edit dates and cross out the rules that no longer apply. Don't you think it would be easier to read if you only included the new rules and deletedmthe rules that no longer applied? It would make the whole thing more streamlined.
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