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 DRAGONFLY  [E]
children's poem--a girl picks an unusual Halloween costume
by ridinghhood-p.boutilier
Review of DRAGONFLY  
Review by Beholden
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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A pleasant little poem that carries the reader gently from one thought to the next and ends with a more serious thought. I like especially that you included a note regarding the actual dragonfly at the bottom of the page. This yields a third aspect to the poem - it's educational as well as everything else!

A lot of thought has gone into what is apparently a very simple poem. The rhymes are natural and unforced, the rhythm and pace easy on the tongue. Even that last, rather longer line fits neatly into the flow of the poem.

I'm supposed to make a suggestion for improvement but the only thing I can come up with is this: at first I thought the picture of a butterfly above your name was the bug the poem refers to. I thought it was a Halloween pennant dragonfly butterfly, referred to as a dragonfly for brevity's sake. It was only later that I realised that you were really talking about a dragonfly. So it might be an idea to change your sig, if only for the sake of this poem. It might avoid possible confusion.

It's a great poem, however!


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