Great story plot, but far too many mistakes. Do not take this the wrong way. I liked the character and the ending of the story, but there were too many mistakes that stood out. Shouldn't 'steal' be 'steel', and shouldn't 'shiningly' be 'shining'? Also, try to avoid any words that end with 'ly', so you can make it sound far better. I'm not going to go into anymore detail, as I am sure you'll be able to find the other spelling mistakes.
Final thoughts: I would be glad to come back and review your story once you've updated it. Until then, keep posting.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .