I don't mind [E] Poem for my toddler. Free verse |
Hi Tiffers, Your I Don't Mind popped up on Read and Review and I'm here to share my thoughts. First impression, the title is a bit intriguing, it will attract the random reader. The frame is Free Verse poem in 23 lines. It reads out loud with a staccato rhythm, kind of like reading a list. The thought units are broken into 5 stanzas, the first 3 and the 5th end in a refrain. The first 4 stanzas are in present tense though there is a jump in years between the 3rd and 4th stanzas and the style of writing changes. The last stanza is in the future yet the refrain remains in the present tense. I followed this but it feels to me like the 4th stanza needs to fit the rest of the piece more cohesively. If it were mine I would rethink not the content but how it is written. This is just one person's opinion, use what you find helpful and ignore the rest. I certainly can relate to this poem, a mother cherishes everything about her child as it grows. And you can't always predict the future outcome. I enjoyed reading, I Don't Mind. Thank you, ~~Tink My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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