Hallo! I visited your portfolio because it was your WDC Anniversary earlier this month. The title and brief description intrigued me. I'm guessing you've written these without any capital letters as a style choice. This has begun well - but it looks like it has been left incomplete. I was looking forward to reading a heartwarming anecdote about a family moment, but it stopped! I was wondering whether to review it, and then decided I should anyway. Suggestions: 1. Please pick one more genre to give this more exposure on site. 2. You've plunged into the incident straight off. I think somewhere, either to begin with or down the line, I'd like a physical description of the people (given they're real people) and each one's age when the incident occurred. 3. Some WritingML like font, size and line-space to make this easier on the eye. As I said, this is unfinished but I thought I'd send you a revew anyway. If you decide to complete it and feel like sending me a link then, I'd really be happy to see how it turns out and to re-review it then. It would be nice to read about siblings who are close-knit! Write On! - Sonali "TRICK OR TREAT - Fourteen Reviews" "October 2022 Reviews" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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