My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The author reflects on life and love, and how he nurtured one aspect of his life and not the other. Now he finds himself with regrets.


WHAT I LIKED

I liked the word play; it deepened the expression of the poem.

STRUCTURE

Each stanza consists of two lines which rhyme. The "shortness" of the stanzas heightens the emotional regret of the poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "attenuated fingers brushed over the stone, teary eyed, dejected, he emits a moan." Great visual, heartfelt emotion.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Well written. The poem does a great job of evoking emotion. I have no suggestions for improvement.