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Greetings, Dee!

Welcome to our wondrous international writing community, and to the "The Poet's Place " Open in new Window. group, in particular. You have done a fine job of populating your port and finding your way around to the various activities to be found around this vast site. The following observations are offered in the spirit of friendly hospitality and constructive support. Of course, they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

TITLE:

Like the names of your children, a title gives your brainchild a specific identity. It is also a critical element of your composition, because it is the portal through which a prospective reader must pass to enter the realm of your imagination. It sets the tone and prepares the reader for what is to come.

The name given to this poem invites that browser to share one of humanity's most precious treasures.

FORM & STRUCTURE:

The poem is a compact, condensed structure of language which is smaller, more formal, more patterned, and more complicated than prose. It is an architecture of lines and shapes, scenes and stories, but it is also an experience that engages the reader’s senses, emotions, and understanding of life.

The single body of text presents a compact framework upon which to drape the word pictures you are painting.

The variation in line length, ranging from four syllables to eleven in no particular pattern, generates a sense of intensity to reinforce the descriptions being presented by your narrator.

IMAGERY:

Imagery is the lifeblood of a poem. Like a craftsman carving, molding, painting, and polishing wood, stone, clay, or some other material, the poet uses words to shape and paint pictures which present some lyrical impulse or spiritual truth. Rather than TELLING the audience about those feelings, the poet SHOWS the impressions through distinct images that project emotional overtones and associations with other images and events. In this way, the poet stirs an emotional response from the reader.

The "vast ocean" and "changing tide" metaphors provide solid images projected on the screens of your audience's imaginations to represent the scope and nature of the emotions being portrayed by your narrator.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

Art happens in two places: in writers' minds as they create it, and in readers' minds as they perceive it. Creative writers explore possibilities through a lens colored by past experience and share them with an unseen audience. They call upon a unique reservoir of such enlightenment, conceptual skill and innovative research to evoke some spiritual reaction from your audience--be it joy, melancholy, shock, or any of a thousand others.

Again, you are off to a very good start in this process of developing the craft of composing poetry. Write on!

Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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