Your words show invisibility in your poem, but your poem shines brightly and you the writer are not invisible. I can picture you writing and enjoying the word journey. Your words work well together creating somber yet I feel hopeful feelings. It seems as if these words of yours were seeking visibility and hope for a bright future. I sniffed the perfume and in my mind, it seemed to have a spring scent of renewal. I guess my reactions to your poem are positive because I prefer to see the bright side of things. I don't know of any way I would change your poem to make it better. If you decided to add to it, I suggest delving more into feelings, and if possible show the bright side of things. I really like the imagery you show through your words sharing feelings, smell, and actions Thank you for writing and for sharing your word art with me and WDC members.. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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