Nice one - I like what you did with the prompt words. You had me reading throughout, and when I began to see where it was going, I had to read on to know if I had guessed correctly! Your descriptions are spot on and the emotions are well brought out. The plot moves forward apace with the dialogue. The direct way of speaking to the reader works, too. You've captured a lot in the space of a few words.
Thanks for sharing this heartwarming tale. I have no suggestions!
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