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Anniversary Reviews  (E) Celebrate Writing.Com member account anniversaries with reviews. #1565040 by NaNoNette

and found it was your anniversary!!



I popped into your port and found Gary the Gnome!

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

Gary and Gnome is kidnapped and goes on the adventure of a lifetime.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the whimsical feel of the story. Very fun and heartwarming.

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person from Gary's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes.

SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: rural travel/tourist places

This is something that is clarified for the reader.

CHARACTERS

Gary

Gary wants to go home. If I was him, I would too. If anything I thought that Gary just remembering the spell was a bit too convenient and I might have had him find a piece of trash with the words, or a maybe he overheard two other gnomes talking about the spell.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

Suggestion as mentioned above. The opening engages the reader. A lighthearted story that is fun to read.