Promptly Poetry Challenge 2022-23 [18+] Rd 3 of producing poetry prompted by Lilli. ☕️ Jacobs Cronat Gold is brewing! ☕️ |
Hi there Merry_Mikey, I'm LeJenD' and I've chosen to do this week's review for PPC3 on your poem. Theme/Subject Matter: The poem was about the tides brought about during summer storms. Form: Haiku - You followed the haiku form perfectly. Lines were not rhymed, syllables per line were exact, and you used a present tense view to write about the natural phenomenon of tides during summer storms. Originality/Creativity: Your final line, "my swimsuit unused" shows a unique viewpoint about the tides resulting from summer storms. Emotion/Impact: Your words inspired me to imagine a beach as raging tides hit the shoreline, invoking the intense feeling of the storms and tides as well as the wistfulness of the person who is kept from swimming. My Favorite Part: The final line. It gave me the feeling of a person watching the tides while dreaming of being able to swim in those same seas where the tide angrily meets the shore. My Suggestions: I have absolutely no suggestions to make. This was a great example of haiku. In Summation: I quite enjoyed your haiku about the tides of a summer storm. The picture you painted with your words was precise and easy to see. This review is a gift to you from "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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