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Too much work and no play.
by Dr M C Gupta Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Aha!
I'm sure many people will be able to relate to this poem - hectic schedules leaving no time for leisure activities, and when this time is obtained, the preoccupation with the work that takes the joy away.
Also the realisation that some people are workaholics and there is no cure!

The rhyme scheme and verse structure bring your message across effectively. My suggestions would be to pick genres; and to look at the repeated word 'play' in the first verse and maybe tweak one of the occurrences of this word.

Write On!
Work On!
Leisure On!
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