Hallo!
This one showed up on Read and Review, and I'm glad it did.

You paint a lovely picture of the twilit time. The words chosen echo your message perfectly, and the images come through beautifully. I like the alliteration, too!

Suggestions:
1. Since you are personifying the dusk, wouldn't you rather say 'her' instead of 'it'?
Also, the word 'its' in the context here doesn't need an apostrophe (first and last verse).
2. I think some WritingML like font, size, linespacing, colour and centre would enhance the impact of the poem.
3. The word 'aggregate' didn't somehow fit in with the rhythm of the poem.

Write On!
Sonali

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