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Review #4664104
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 "LET'S GET WILD" Open in new Window. [13+]
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Well, what a ride!
The rhyme scheme, verse structure and rhythm work well for the content of the lyrics.
So I was enjoying it throughout because I thought you were talking to someone whom you actually know and are trying to get wild with. The last line took my enjoyment away, since it showed you don't respect the person at all. Till then, the lyrics had a tongue-in-cheek tone that made a fun read, that last line came as a let down. Makes you sound like a man judging a woman on externals. (Just my personal opinion, others may disagree!)

Suggestions:
1. The intro doesn't have to be non-E, it's okay at E.
2. Since you have the word 'devil' in the chorus, you could look at changing it where you have it in one of the lines.

I'm not quite sure how to rate this, but I think I'll go purely on the writing skill and not on the opinion!

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