This one showed up on 'Read and Review' and I'm glad it did! What a warm and fuzzy feeling this has left me with.
What I like:
1. The rhyme scheme, verse structure, words
2. The beginning, where you set the scene
3. The description of the family gathering and how those who have passed away continue to be present
Suggestions:
Just a minor suggestion
I'd like to see an adjective for the pumpkin pie - 'Granny's famous pumpkin pie' something like that, to enhance what it meant to you ... ?
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