HI April! I am here with a review to celebrate you!
What a clear vivid picture comparing two images in the present moment. I liked the move from "growing" to barking". At first I thought the hydrangea was barking so maybe a dash after "growing" would serve to delineate better. The great surprise twist of the dog barking and breaking branches. Our pup likes to lay down under our bushes! LOL
I liked the soundscape created with the repeated b sounds. The form follows a traditional haiku format well and you use phrases at first. In haiku one tries to avoid sentences,
I could so relate to the experience you shared. Thanks for honouring the haiku form in your way.
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