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I love it!
The title grabbed me. The genres you've picked work for the poem. My suggestion would be for the brief description. When I first came across it, I felt it was okay. But, having read the poem, I think you could make the brief description a little more vague, to intrigue the reader.

I like the presentation of the poem with no capital letters. Maybe you'd like to centralise it and put it in italics, for the look to enhance the words.

Suggestions:
Since you are saying you 'are' the unfinished story, not 'like' the unfinished story, maybe you'd consider removing the word 'like' from the other things you wish to be.

In the first verse, 'beautifully written' somehow diluted the personification for me. I think just 'beautiful' would be enough.

In the second verse, when you say you 'wouldn't give', it leaves me wondering which came first - the not giving or the being unfinished. Was that deliberately left to interpretation? Otherwise, you may look at changing the phrase.

Thanks for sharing this lovely poem!
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