This poem was fun to read. The title is evocative and the images of how you feel about the food you describe. The flow was lively with a happy vibration. I could feel the let down of the sigh at the last line.
The flow and rhyme were effective and the pace was quick. I could sense the hunger and joy for food of the speaker. Good use of active verbs like "vanish" and repeated sounds like "pasta penne" added flavour to the soundscape.
Thanks for sharing this entertaining poem that in a fun way portrays the issue with scales and food! I am so glad I never had that issue. It can be tough according to my sister.
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Greetings Sherasi. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" 
This poem was fun to read. The title is evocative and the images of how you feel about the food you describe. The flow was lively with a happy vibration. I could feel the let down of the sigh at the last line. 
The flow and rhyme were effective and the pace was quick. I could sense the hunger and joy for food of the speaker. Good use of active verbs like "vanish" and repeated sounds like "pasta penne" added flavour to the soundscape.
Thanks for sharing this entertaining poem that in a fun way portrays the issue with scales and food! I am so glad I never had that issue. It can be tough according to my sister. 
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You responded to this review 02/28/2022 @ 10:50am EST