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He Said / She Said  [13+]
People say the darndest things!
by Words Whirling 'Round
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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"What a great concept!" she exclaimed, thoughtfully.

"And I love the layout, too," he agreed, attractively.

*Wink*

This one showed up on Random Reads and I'm glad it did. I enjoyed the verbs and adverbs that reflect the situation, my favourite being lack-a-daisy-cally. I mean, really! *Rolling*
(I was thinking - she rose lackadaisically, her tulips puckered in reproach ... )

The layout, font and type size increase the enjoyment of the sentences.

Suggestions:
1. Add 'Writing' as a genre - it'll help when people search that genre.
2. You've used verbs and adverbs that exist.
I'd love to see you take the nonsense a bit further with made up words ('she sang hummishly' or something like that) and see where that takes you! Would actually be fun to have an in-and-out with people coming up with their own verbs & adverbs thus!

Thanks for sharing this,
Write Onishly,
Look at the piggie -- Kiya drew him, and Secret Squirrel gifted him to me! Thank you!!

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