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Given: Feb 25, 2022 at 5:28pm
Length: 1,189 Characters |
1,005 w/o WritingML
A Review
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First Impression Witty and compelling. You begin by introducing your characters (the three sleuths) with a bit of humor talking about sushi (and such ). What a hoot it would be if you continued writing this story using these characters! I loved their humor and personalities up to this point. And the ending definitely left me wanting more. You've really got some great characters here.
Thoughts/Suggestions I found no typos. Good job! It was just a wee bit confusing with the untagged dialogue in the last section, but most of the time, I knew who was talking.
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