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 Secrets  [E]
Contest Entry for No Dialogue Contest August 10, 2019
by Chris Breva
Review of Secrets  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hallo!
This one showed up on Random Reads, and the title intrigued me. I'd suggest modifying the brief description a bit to add to the intrigue, and adding a 'genre' since you have room for one more.

I love acrostics, so it was good to see one!

I like the layout of the poem, though I'd suggest you try increasing the line spacing and see if that makes it easier to read.

The interpretations of the word 'secrets' are well portrayed. I could relate to the poem totally.

My favourite phrases are: 'Creative mysteries' and 'Eerie secluded data'.

The suggestions I have are toward the end:
1. Repetition of the word 'secluded' - you could look at changing one of these if you like.
2. The phrase 'Top Secretly' tripped me up a bit. It seemed to be there just to fit the acrostic format. Maybe take another look at it ... ?

Thanks for sharing this poem!
Write On!
Thanks, Gervic and Falguni!

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