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 | The Shoe Emporium  [E] An emporium of shoes that sells whatever kind of shoes one could want  |
| (4.5)   Greetings, Detective, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . You are one of fourteen entries in the January Round. Thank you for participating!   First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Easy to understand Followed the prompt & rules First Impressioon: Great flow and a fun read. It would make a cute TV advertisement! Nice meter and rhyming, too. Technicalities/Suggestions:  Not sure if kids know what a facsimile is, but then again, children are much smarter than given credit, so perhaps they do.  I'm sure they know what a fax is, of course, but then that doesn't rhyme!  You might consider using more punctuation in a children's poem. Example:How do you choose Which pair is best for you[?] worrywort --> worry wart or worrywart. (I have also seen it spelled worrywort in other places, but wort actually is derived from an old English word (wyrt) meaning plant, root, or herb, like in St. John's Wort, for example.)  Favorites:For those who play a sport There's no need to be a worrywort  Final thoughts: A nice variety of shoes! Good job and best of luck in the contest! Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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You responded to this review 02/11/2022 @ 9:42pm EST