*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4647070
Review #4647070
Viewing a review of:
 My Shoes  [E]
Children's poem about shoes
by catdok
Review of My Shoes  
Review by Cubboo! (22!)
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Write 4 Kids clip art image

Greetings, catdok, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest . Your entry is one of fourteen in the January Round. Thank you for participating!


*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt & rules

*Crayons4* First Impression: Loved the bounciness of this piece, as I'm sure children would, too. And I'm sure many kids (and parents) could relate to this poem! Learning to tie shoes can be frustrating for a child. *Bigsmile*

*Crayons5* Technicalities: You might want to consider adding punctuation, but that's up to you. I've been told in the past that it helps children know where to pause and where to stop. Something to think about, anyway.

*Crayons2* Favorites:

They give my feet
A place to stay
While I am having fun


*Up*

I love this stanza! *Smile*

*Crayons8* Thank you for entering! Best of luck in the contest.


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
Cubby ")
Animated WDC Angel Signature for Premium Members

*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!.
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 02/11/2022 @ 6:21pm EST
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4647070