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A Centipede went to K-mart  [E]
Poem about a centipede buying shoes. Winning entry Writing 4 kids Contest Jan 22.
by lezismore-moreislez
Review by Cubboo! (22!)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, lezismore-moreislez , I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest " . This is one of fourteen entries in the January round! Thank you for participating!

*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt & rules

*Crayons4* First Impression: How creative! And an illustrator's playground! So many pairs of shoes in every color and style. *Smile* Great rhythm and flow, too, along with the rhymes.

*Crayons5* Technicalities: No typos, great punctuation, all good!

*Crayons2* Favorites:

A centipede went to Kmart,
For one thousand pairs of shoes.


A great way to begin this piece. My interest was piqued right away. *Wink*

*Crayons8* Final thoughts: I really enjoyed this. Just a thought, but you might consider adding more stanzas and trying to publish it as a picture book. The illustrations would be colorful and fun! Of course, you might have to change K-mart to something made-up, like Foot Mart or whatever. *Laugh*

Great job! Best of luck in the contest.


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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