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 Sleeping feet, Aizawa Shouta and Student Open in new Window. [18+]
This is a foot, hand, fetishist story, if you don't like this thing, don't read it
by HiLol5678 Author Icon
Review by sindbad Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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HiLol5678

This is a nice and interesting flow of story you have. As a reader l did get distracted with /\* and other words written in abbreviation. I am sure once you edit the story you will rectify these minor irritants. Also try to create more paragraphs and use small chunk of paragraphs. This will help readers understand the crux of your creative story better..sindbad

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