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 | Creating Motion in Fiction  [13+] How to apply show don't tell principle and adjust the pace of the story  |
| (5.0)| Hi, Joy! I am reviewing your item as part of the July Challenge in "Angel Review Forum" , which I'm taking part in. Each case color needs at least three reviews (not the same member) plus eight members of my choice, totaling twenty. You, dear Joy, fall into the purple category.  I love articles such as this one, challenging me to improve my skill. Showing vs telling is something we as writers don't always think about. And sometimes it's easier just to tell it because we're too lazy to figure out how to show it.  But most of the time, at least for me, many of us aren't aware of it.Which brings me to the exercise you suggest: A practical exercise is to take an already written piece and circle all the sentences that can benefit from being shown and then re-writing the whole piece. Great recommendation! This should be something we all do after our first draft of anything! Another great point you make is: This means not just the characters but also the narrative need to move with action producing words and sentences, as the expository parts of the work create momentum and evade flatness and boredom. You mention this because many readers are so strongly conditioned by movies and television, it's easy to lose interest in a novel or short story. I find myself deleting many audio books I begin because they don't grab me right away. I get bored and feel like I'm wasting my time. It's unfortunate because I might be missing a great story! But then again, perhaps there needs to be more motion in the beginning. (I like that you refer to showing as motion.) You've provided great examples of show vs tell. It's really quite amazing the difference it makes! Great article! Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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