Another João chapter. Okay, I see now this is a story about vampires. I had a peek at the folder name and saw the note that you are writing these chapters out of order. That explains a lot.
This chapter reads a little like a draft rather than a complete chapter. All the plot points are there. There is a rich, very long history. At the same time, this could use some more details. For instance, Isabella of Aragon being their hope and our bane could use some explaining. What did she do? How did she do it?
The conversation between Lucinda and João is not really clear who says what in the way it is presented at this moment. I would have to know more details from either character's life to easily be able to say who says what. For instance, who said the final goodbye to Rosinha? And, did she die or leave? Or did the other person leave?
Definitely a story that you should keep writing. It is full of mystery.
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