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Visually appealing Easy to understand Followed the prompt
Plot: After moving from the big city into the country, Sarah realizes she isn't able to buy the essentials she had access to before her move, and the ingredients she uses for the special formula she needs for the baby, is next to impossible to find. Then she comes up with a great idea!
Characters: Believable characters
Dialogue: Good dialogue
Setting: The country
Technicalities: I didn't pick up on any misspellings, grammar issues, or typos. I did, however, notice you have this rated for age 13+ and also as non-fiction. Not sure if you meant that, or not.
Favorites: I loved the ending! What an unsuspecting surprise!
Final thoughts: Like me, I think children would love your ending. And Nan, too, of course. This is an adorable story. I really liked your title! Best of luck in the contest!
Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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