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 Perspective (Redux) Open in new Window. [E]
A villainous fiend is tried for his crimes. (Contest Entry)
by Chris24 Author Icon
Review by Starling Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title: Review: Perspective (Redux) by Chris24 - Sci-fi

The opinions contained in this review are subjective, with the intent to be honest and helpful.
Please take that which you find useful, and toss the rest with good cheer. {/center}

Title and Author: Perspective (Redux) by Chris24

In the interest of clarity, I will be using the following conventions in my review:
c:black}Your Words:
Review comments
My Impressions as I read:
Editing Suggestions:

Plot::
An intergalactic criminal is tried by the human race. There are several charges he has reasonable (although insane) answers to. Will he be found guilty? The reader may never know.

Hook:
The first sentence is the hook. It pulls the reader into the story with questions on what are the charges and why are there charges in the first place. There is a twist in the end which makes you question if the trial even exists. It is left up to the reader to figure it out.

Opening Sentence and Paragraph:
Very short opening sentence is the hook.

Characters Development:
The character development is done through mostly dialogue. There is some description of the main character who is on trial, but not of those who are running the trial.

Dialogue:
The dialogue is from the main character who has to explain to the judge why he did the things he did. All his answers are perfectly logical.

Punctuation and Structure:
I found very few errors in the punctuation. The story is easy to follow and is in chronological order.

Closing Statement
At first I thought this was just going to be another space alien bad guy trial. You have been able to pull several psychological questions into it. I love when this is done. You come up with sound arguments on why the main character did what they did and truly believes he has done the only thing he could do to be a true beneficiary to the different races of several planets.

The twist at the end is sort of a head spinner. Were we reading about something that was “really” taking place or were we looking over the shoulder of a young boy daydreaming about possibilities? I’m thinking the possibility exists the child is either going to be a psychotic killer or a brilliant psychologist.

Thank you for posting.

Starling
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...Whispers from the shadows, (no comma) and the next charge was read, ...
...Those Korlans where were about to open a dimensional breach...
... I took action, graciously commanding my drones to acquire their gateway (need comma) and incorporated it into my world crushing (hyphenated) engine.
... Stupid name, (no comma) if you ask me.”


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