Hi Rachel,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with uncertainty and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Logan will realize that Gabe is actually heterosexual before he gets his heart broken. They will read to the last word to find out. The plot is straight forward and moves along logically. In the story, four young people navigate a complicated romantic situation. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)I know, you were too busy staring at Gabe over there,” I rolled my eyes at how he was turning red and I couldn’t help but laugh at him. As I was laughing, he threw a toothpick at me and told me to shut up.
When Gabe finally came over, he took our orders, “What can I get for you two today?” He looked up from his notepad, “Oh, hey Carolina. Hey Logan.” His teeth were straight and white. He had a perfect amount of muscle, they weren’t too big and they weren’t too small. Gabe’s hair was straight, which was surprising since his hair is always messy.-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.

You switch the point of view during the story, but it is done smoothly. The story is consistent in terms of tense. Great job.