Hi Warriorprincess,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone whose life has been complicated by the unwise choices they have made. I am hoping that the speaker has learned to make better personal choices in the future. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have use grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.