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  Greetings, , I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest "  . First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Yes Easy to understand Yes Followed the prompt Yes Summary: After being gifted a teddy bear by Aunt Minnie, Sofia grows up and gives a special present to her aunt on her aunt's wedding day. Characters: Sofia and Aunt Minnie, mostly Dialogue: Decent amount of dialogue Setting: Home, school, wedding reception Technicalities: one-year- old --> one-year-old You also left a space toward the end of the story for ten-year-old.   Her parents, found her a handful, --> Her parents [omit comma] found her a handful,  Together, they would listen to the mom’s fairy tales --> Together, they would listen to [her] mom’s fairy tales; go to places like the Aquarium or Museum.  She shared her dreams for future --> She shared her dreams for [the] future These are all just silly little typos you overlooked. There are a few more, but I'm sure you'll pick up on them yourself. Not many, though.  Favorite: From the moment she got up till the moment she slept, Sofia went about like a top that forgot to stop spinning. Great imagery! Loved this. Final thoughts: It's amazing how children become attached to a teddy bear and how important it can become in their lives. How sweet that Sofia had thought so much of her gift from Aunt Minnie that she presented her aunt with a similar gift on Minnie's wedding day!Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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You responded to this review 03/15/2021 @ 1:04am EDT