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Greetings, bobturn, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest .


*Pencil* First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.

*Boxcheckb* Visually appealing Looks great!
*Boxcheckb* Easy to understand Yes
*Boxcheckb* Followed the prompt Yes

*Crayons4* Internal Conflict: Tony's mother thinks he is too old to carry around his Teddy bear. That is, until she and Fuzzy Bear become pals. *Smile*

*Crayons7* Characters: Tony and his mom

*Crayons* Dialogue: Good dialogue

*Crayons3* Setting: Home, mostly

*Crayons5* Technicalities:
*Notep* “I can barely bear the thought,” Tony’s mother’s hands wrestled --> “I can barely bear the thought[.]” Tony’s mother’s hands wrestled Period should replace comma since there is no dialogue tag. *Wink*
*Notey* “What is wrong, mom?” --> “What is wrong, [M]om?”
*Noteb* start sleeping alone.” Tony’s mom said faintly --> start sleeping alone[,]” Tony’s mom said faintly
*Notev* of your own, Start searching for --> of your own, [s]tart searching for
*Notebl* Fuzzy bear --> Fuzzy [B]ear

*Crayons2* Favorites:
*Starfishb*His mom gasped at getting caught kidnapping Fuzzy and fell on Tony’s bed in a swoon. Good visual!
*Starfishv* Old friends should never be cast off or forgotten. They deserve a forever place in our hearts.
*Starfishr* And the neatest thing of all is fuzzy hugs are free.

*Crayons8* Final thoughts: What a sweet and kind heart you possess, Bob! Your story about hugs comes at a time when many of us are missing them! Perhaps everyone should own a Teddy bear. *Hug*


Have a great day and...*Quill*
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !
Cubby ")
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