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  Greetings, murphyco, I am reviewing this today as a judge for the "Writing 4 Kids Contest "  . First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. Visually appealing Loved the font and size! Easy to understand Great flow and clear sequencing Followed the prompt Met the requirements Plot Elijah is willing to give up his favorite toy in order to help Stuart feel welcome at his new school and offering his friendship. Characters: First-grader: Elijah, New student: Stuart, and the teacher--Mrs. Sanders Dialogue: Excellent, well-balanced Setting: School and Elijah's bedroom Technicalities: There are only a few... “Miss Sanders why won’t Stuart talk --> “Miss Sanders, why won’t Stuart talk [forgot comma] “Which race car won’t I miss? --> “Which race car won’t I miss?" [forgot end-quotation mark] “It’s yours for keeps my newest friend. --> “It’s yours for keeps, my newest friend. [forgot comma] Favorites: So many! Here are just a few... but never said a single word. Just focused on his shoe. Love this visual By morning, though, he wasn’t sure if sharing him was right. Heart-tug! I’ll want to get Houdini back - in case I move again.” Awww... Final thoughts: Such a feel-good piece! Any child would love this story set in rhyme! I liked that Elijah was willing to give Stuart his treasured bear, and in the end...it all worked out.  Have a great day and...  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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You responded to this review 03/12/2021 @ 11:37am EST